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Stylistic Writing Exercise|Word Order Confusion

It is also a sample essay for the new sexy magazine writing activity.
original:
At noon, in a fast food restaurant, a woman, 30 years old, 165 cm tall, with fair skin and freckles on her cheeks, was wearing a light blue floral dress with a red silk scarf around her. Bought a burger set at the restaurant.
She was holding a dinner plate to find a seat. A young man sat on the seat where she was about to sit down. She had a conflict with the young man. Finally, the young man stood up with a bad expression and bumped into her dinner plate as he walked, and the cola fell. down.
The woman pointed at the young man's back, and after scolding for a while, she began to eat. She accidentally got a silk scarf while squeezing the ketchup, and she immediately took a tissue to clean it.
In the afternoon, she was drinking coffee in a coffee shop with a man in a black suit. She had changed into a blue silk scarf. The man said that this dress looks better with a red silk scarf.


Creation: word order disorder type


I remember very well before I came here.

Thirty women, 651 meters.

blacken! Then white, freckled, on both sides. Dress flower blue, broken. A red silk scarf.

Western fast food. Eat well! Bought a burger set.

Tray seating, man.

younger brother. Want sneakers. I'll give you 8,000 yuan. Just got paid. It's useless for my sister to eat hamburgers. Go with dad. Not dad. It's useless to eat a hamburger. Stand up brother, the dinner plate hits him, Coke pours him, walks him.

If I don't work, my brother earns 8,000 yuan a month. I don't like hamburgers every month. I don't like hamburgers for the next month.

To die, to die, to die for the hamburger.

Scarf with dirty ketchup. Take a paper towel.

dad. Suit black coffee. Change the blue scarf.

Dad is going on a blind date with me. Say blue does not match red, silk scarf skirt.

Gamble not to gamble. Money asks for money. Blind date is rich.

all gone. go daddy. Dad go. return by yourself. Take a turn. blacken.

Right here. I haven't eaten a hamburger in twenty years.



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